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Prologue: Her Unseen Squire by ~AbattoirxAbdication:iconAbattoirxAbdication:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Narrative > Fixed




The laces broke,
As though someone had run a knife through her back and pulled against her,
She felt a stroke,
That which had saved her was at the end of her tether.  
The sheet slid off down to the stone,
She sensed his eyes tracing the outline of the v-shaped smile,
He was of the unknown,
Yet she empathised with his guile.

Out of the socket,
The string fell to the cement,
It emerged from his pocket,
That flowery scent.
The wax thawed,
Gloomy ambience,
Down he gnawed,
It struck her at once;

The acquiescence.
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This a prologue to a story I'm writing..

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~MrAMP Apr 27, 2008, 5:44:31 AM
I can't wait to see the rest. Excellent work.

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Soon...very soon...it will begin.
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~lissa420 Apr 27, 2008, 6:57:21 AM
I'm not sure I'm getting the proper visual impression with this since it is unfinished. Still, your talent for poetry is apparent.

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Do you think it at all possible for us to maybe just completely disregard that last statement?
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~loudwisdom Apr 27, 2008, 9:04:20 AM
oo i like very much

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Everyone feels a certain way for a reason, when you read a person’s poem you’re glimpsing at their very soul
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~AbattoirxAbdication Apr 28, 2008, 9:19:38 AM
heehee! Thank yoou =D

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~AbattoirxAbdication Apr 28, 2008, 9:20:51 AM
Haha.. Yeah, it's meant to be ambiguous. You're not supposed to understand it until after you read the story.. Which I have only written a few lines for.. Don't know if it'll ever be complete =P

But thanks anyway =D

ps. I love reading your journal entries (even though I don't always comment on them)

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~AbattoirxAbdication Apr 28, 2008, 9:27:37 AM
Thank you. Don't know when the story will be up.. Have barely started writing it, but I think the wait will be worth it, because I think it'll be a very strange/interesting one.. =P

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~lissa420 Apr 28, 2008, 2:44:10 PM
I'm sure that it'll be great once you get it all together. ♥

Oh really? ;D Thank you! I'll have to try and write more of them, then. Things have been rather busy and art has been put at a stand still. It's been a stretch for me just to get in poetry. xD

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Do you think it at all possible for us to maybe just completely disregard that last statement?
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~Kamzed Apr 28, 2008, 4:47:51 PM
Every time I think I get the metaphor/image going, you go and change it.

Rawr.


I can't wait to read the story this is attached to.
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~AbattoirxAbdication May 2, 2008, 2:09:55 AM
Haha.. Well, what image do you get from this poem?

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